June 2022

Every month, I check out 30 recently published picture books and share their first lines (and hooks, for NF).

Elements of a great first line

*makes the reader wonder something                     

*sets the tone for the story                                             

*starts in the middle of the action                               

*hints at a universal theme                                             

*establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader into the story

*introduces the main character and their problem
(bonus points if the character is particularly unusual)

*sets the scene of the story

*hints at the how the story will end

*engages the reader

*engages multiple senses

*references a beloved classic

*hints at an unusual premise

*introduces the concept

All books in this collection were published in 2022.

Knight Owl

by Christopher Denise


First line: Since the day he hatched, Owl had one wish.

elements used: introduces the main character and makes the reader wonder something

One Wish: Fatima al-Fihri and the World’s Oldest University

by M.O. Yuksel, art by Mariam Quraishi

Hook: life story of Fatima al-Fihri, focusing on her love of education and explaining how she achieved her dream of building a university where everyone was welcome

First line: Fatima craved knowledge like desert flowers crave rain.

elements used: introduces the main character and establishes a lyrical tone that pulls the reader in

The Legend of the
STORM GOOSE

by Finoa Halliday


First line: Erin loved the stories Papa told of his adventures at sea.

elements used: introduces the main character and hints at the universal theme of family

Monster in the Bathhouse

by Sina Merabian


First line: The bathhouse is always busy the day before Nowruz.

elements used: hints at the universal excitement of a holiday

Seeking BEST Friend

by Alison Marcotte, art by Diane Ewen


First line: Seeking Best Friend: Must be Kind. 

elements used: hints at the universal desire for friendship

Stella Keeps the Sun Up

by Clothilde Ewing, art by Lynn Gaines


First line: Hi, I’m Stella.

elements used: introduces the main character and engages the reader

THE CRAB BALLET

by Renee M LaTulippe, art by Cecile Metzger


First lines: Welcome. Enter. Sit right there upon our finest driftwood chair.

Elements used: engages the reader and establishes a rhythm that pulls the reader in 

Counting to BANANAS

by Carrie Tillotson, art by Estrela Laurent


First line: 1 plum

elements used: establishes the concept

THIS IS A SCHOOL

by John Schu, art by Veronica Miller Jamison


First line: This is a kid.

elements used: employs the universal appeal of the obvious

Wild For Winnie

by Laura Marx Fitzgerald, art by Jenny Lovlie


First line: The teacher said a new kid was joining our class.

elements used: hints at the universal appeal of the excitement of something new 

BLACK: The Many Wonders of my World

by Nancy Johnson James, art by Constance Moore


First line: Black is a wonderful color.

elements used: introduces the concept

Dog Says
Cat Says

by Marilyn Singer, art by Sonia Sanchez


First line: It’s morning!

elements used: employs the universal appeal of a new day

Bear With Me

by David Michael Slater, art by Davilyn Lynch


First line: “You sure you need to take Mr. Kalamazoo with you?” Max’s mom asked.

elements used: hints at the main character’s problem

I'll Take Care of You

by Maria Loretta Giraldo, art by Nicoletta Bertelle


First line: Once there was a tiny seed.

Elements used: hints at the universal appeal of nature and the excitement of something new, and makes the reader wonder something

I Love You

by Shige Chen, art by Pia Valentinis and Mario Onnis


First line: Once upon a time there was a boy and a girl.

elements used: hints at a beloved classic and a universal theme 

With Lots of LOVE

by Jenny Torres Sanches, art by Andre Ceolin


First line: Rocio had a new home.

elements used: introduces the main character and the universal idea of something new, and hints at a potential problem

The Garden We Share

By Zoe Tucker, art by Julianna Swaney


First line: On a bright spring morning as the sun peeps shyly through the trees we step out into the garden.

elements used: introduces the universal appeal of spring

A Gift for Nana

by Lane Smith


First line: It was not his Nana’s birthday.

elements used: makes the reader wonder something

Mushroom Rain

by Laura K Zimmerman, art by Jamie Green

Hook: a deep dive into the sensory appeal of mushrooms and their impact on the water cycle 

First line: Without warning, they appear. Mushrooms!

elements used: introduces an unusual premise

A Penny's Worth

by Kimberly Wilson, art by Mark Hoffman


First line: Hot off the minting press, Penny sparkled.

elements used: introduces an unusual main character and engages multiple senses

Time Flies

by Tara Lazar, art by Ross MacDonald


First line: After dozing in my chair, I had some time on my hands.

elements used: makes the reader wonder something and establishes the tone of the story

Being a Dog
A Tail of Mindfulness

by Maria Gianferrari, art by Pete Oswald


First line: Can you be like a dog?

elements used: engages the reader, makes the reader wonder something, and hints at an unusual premise

Tofu Takes Time

by Helen H Wu, art by Julie Jarema


First line: Today I’m making tofu with NaiNai!

elements used: introduces the main character, hints at the universal theme of family, and sets the scene for the story

Big and Small
and In-Between

by Carter Higgins, art by Daniel Mayares


First line: the sun and its shine when it asks you to rise

elements used: hints at a universal theme and has a rhythm that pulls the reader in

Earth Friend Forever

by Molly Bloom, Marc Sanchez, and Sanden Totten; art by Mike Orodan


First line: Dear little humans living on me: It’s your E.F.F.!*

elements used: introduces an unusual main character, engages the reader, and makes the reader wonder something

Mama and Mommy and Me in the Middle

by Nina LaCour, art by Kaylani Juanita


First line: MONDAY The sun is still hiding and the moon is still bright when Mommy kisses my cheek and says, “Good morning.”

elements used: hints at the universal excitement of a change in routine and the universal theme of family

emile and the field

by Kevin Young, art by Chioma Ebinama


First line: There was a boy named Emile who fell in love with a field.

elements used: introduces the main character and an unusual premise, and makes the reader wonder something

I'm Terrified of Bath Time

by Simon Rich, art by Tom Toro


First line: Can I tell you a secret?

elements used: engages the reader, makes the reader wonder something, and uses the universal appeal of secrets

Bearnard Writes a Book

by Deborah Underwood, art by Misa Saburi


First line: Bernard and Gertie were reading about the brave bear in Bearnard’s Book.

elements used: introduces the main characters, starts in the middle of an action, and makes the reader wonder something

Oona and the Shark

by Kelly DiPucchio, art by Raissa Figueroa


First line: Like most mermaids, Oona was good at making friends.

elements used: hints at the universal themes of friendship and pride and introduces a popular main character and an unlikely duo

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